英语作文七个提分点

好的英语作文要坚持两个原则：

Informative：信息量丰富——要点全部覆盖、且在细节上有适度的发挥；

Economical：经济的——即用词简约，不为凑字数而使用冗余的词和结构。

1. 用介词词组和副词状语丰富句子信息

例如：We held a meeting.——

We held a meeting in our classroom afterschool.

（添加时间和地点状语，使之更具画面感）

2. 主题句先行原则、且主题句至少包含SVA三要素；

例如：

With pressure, we know what to do and how to achieve our goals. Without pressure, we are just like a child having no idea of responsibility.——

People always believe that where there is pressure, there is motivation. With pressure, we know what to do and how to achieve our goals. Without pressure, we are just like a child having no idea of responsibility.

（用Where there is…there is…这句先行概括pressure的作用。）

3. 描述时如使用形容词，则用具体行为动词句子支撑；

例如：

It is sunny and the fields are beautiful in spring. ——

It is sunny and the countryside is beautiful in spring. The field is covered with green trees and colorful flowers.

（用is covered with…支撑beautiful）

4. 使用It/There、倒装、状语前置等句型变换主语；

例如：I hesitated at first and didn’t believe I could do it well. But I said yes at last because I wanted to try something new. ——

At first I felt so crazy and didn’t believe I could do it well. But I said yes at last because, anyway, it was interesting to try something new.

（改变成分顺序，突出部分信息；使用it句式，使句子开头富于变化。）

5. 使用复合句（如宾语从句、定语从句等）以减少相同词语的重复；

例如：

Mr. Lee had his own ways to make his lessons lively. His lessons left us deep impression.——

Mr. Lee had his own ways to make his lessons lively, which left us deep impression.

（使用定语从句，代替his lessons的重复，表达了相同意思）

6. 恰当的使用被动语态，以突出特定对象；

例如：

People are destroying our environment. They cut down trees and pour so much waste into rivers. ——

Our environment is being destroyed. Trees are cut down and so much waste is poured into rivers.

（主语改为environment，trees，waste，更有画面感、显得触目惊心。）

7. 恰当地使用动词非谓语形式、以达到简约。

例如：

Some people are not confident. They feel it hard to express their ideas properly. They believe that no one loves them. ——

Some people are not confident, feeling it hard to express their ideas properly and believing that no one loves them.

（节约了不必要重复的主语，一句话表达清楚全部。）

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